This is a nice story about teachers but I don't know what your main point is that you're trying to get across to me. I thought it was going to be about how teachers aren't paid that much but do it anyway. You do hit on that as one of your points but you also mention how teachers play an important role in students lives and vice versa. What do you want to get across here? Is it that teachers are selfless individuals that truly affect the lives of their students? Is it that teachers are poorly paid for the service they provide? I just can't tell from your video. It would have been nice for you to insert some facts about teacher pay as well. Did you research how much teachers are paid? Did you find out how much they are paid and when the high cost of living in Hawaii is factored in, how that affects their pay? You need some hard facts in there and a teacher telling you that they should be paid more isn't the same. Your audio levels are all over the place too. They need to be more level. What happened with Mrs. Funamura's interview? Why is that so dark? Can you lighten it up in Final Cut? I think you need to go back and redo your 5 points and re-edit this video. I think you have some good footage here but you really need to determine what it is that you're trying to get across. Your script also doesn't match your video. I'm giving this a 3.2 which is a low B.
I loved quarter 1. Can't wait until quarter 2.